The First time I started School...
Creek… the door is slowly opening my mom comes in and sits on my bed, my mom said it's your first day of school. I smiled and screamed YAY! But not too loud to wake my brother Conner up. When I saw my school uniform I was so happy I had to put it on that second, When I was putting it my uniform on I could smell, that yummy yummy breakfast cooking.
Hi my name is Malia and I am a student in hay park school.I am a year 5 and I am 9 year old. My class is room 8 also the name of my class room is called Hansen class and my teacher's name is Miss Huys .I really liked about when you said that you could smell that yummy breakfast was I pancakes or was I something else.Please tell me I really really like to know.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Sophie, I am Amelia from Red Hill School, I like how you put a capital letter at the beginning of a new sentence. I like how you put describing words in your story I hope you post more stories.
ReplyDeleteHi Sophie my name is Myat and I am a student from Glen Taylor School I liked how you told us what you smelt and that your happy with your school uniform. I like how you used describing words too.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Lily and I am a student from Glen Taylor School. I like how you used descriptive words and i like how you were excited about your school and that your happy with your school uniform.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Sophie, I am Selu from Red Hill School. I really like your story. Next time you might like to reread your story and check it makes sense before publishing. I would really like to know what you had for breakfast. I think it would make me hungry.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story I would like to read the rest of the story.